Check my paper (please)

[Namosh]

I suggest you add this as your conclusion.

The average human produces 8.4 tons of carbon dioxide each year. The only logical course of action would be for all concerned tree-huggers to self terminate immediately....for the planet's sake.

[Carroot1]

hey if i get an A on this paper ill mail all you guys some monster cookies. if not then no cookie fo u

[Amerrricuh]

tl;dr

i seriously laughed out loud.

[Carroot1]

I suggest you add this as your conclusion.

The average human produces 8.4 tons of carbon dioxide each year. The only logical course of action would be for all concerned tree-huggers to self terminate immediately....for the planet's sake.

that made me

[CaptainzPlanetz]

Basic highschool paper format is to double space between lines, makes it tons easier to read, and provides a spot for notes from instructor.

[Carroot1]

Basic highschool paper format is to double space between lines, makes it tons easier to read, and provides a spot for notes from instructor.

thanks for the tip. it is double spaced in ms word but when i pasted into the forum it did that and idk how to fix it

[papoose42]

how long is it supposed to be seems mad short for a paper

[Carroot1]

how long is it supposed to be seems mad short for a paper

5-7 pages double spaced 12 size font

[finkster]

Little info

Grade 10

Due tomorrow

thanks!

Global Warming: The Effects on Earth

Did you know that the Earth is warming at a faster pace than ever before? Scientists have been researching and monitoring the Earth's atmosphere for many years, and can now conclude that global warming does exist, which places our planet at risk. Many people believe global warming is simply the Earth getting warmer, but it is much more than that. Gases cause global warming and, in recent years, there have been more of these gases in the atmosphere due to pollution caused by human activities.

Some individuals may want to know exactly what global warming is. Global warming is the natural process of increasing the sun’s heat around the Earth (“Global Warming”1). Global warming affects our planet in many different ways, but how does it affect us? Global warming can affect humans in numerous ways. Right now, we have seen very little change in the Earth’s temperature; so many humans haven’t noticed any type of change. This is due to the Earth’s temperature increasing at a very slow rate. Scientists explain that if we were to compare today’s rate at which the Earth’s temperature is increasing to thousands of years ago, the globe is warming at a much faster rate than ever before. According to (place source here), the surface temperature increased 1.4 degrees between 1980 and 2000 (Cicerone 1). This leads scientists to believe that humans are speeding up the natural process of global warming.

Global warming causes many changes on the earth, but there are ways we can help reduce the impact of these effects. One thing the community can do to help slow the process is to replant trees after logging. This helps reduce the amount of carbon that is released into the atmosphere (“Global Warming” 3). Even the food we eat has an impact on global warming, from growth, harvest, processing, and transporting the food(Rosenthal 1). Reducing the amounts of beef we buy can reduce the effects of global warming. Did you know it takes eleven times more greenhouse gas to produce one pound of beef than it does to produce one pound of chicken (Rosenthal 1)? We also burn fossil fuels from cars, factories, and other substances that emit harmful gases into the atmosphere (Cicerone 1). If we cut down on the amount of fossil fuels we burn, the outlook on our planet would drastically improve. Not trying to be a dick but this sentence doesn't sound like your original writing style...If it came from a source, make sure you cite it ;-)

Greenhouse gases in the Earth’s atmosphere also cause global warming. Greenhouse gases are made up of different types of gases, but the most important gas is carbon dioxide. Most of Earth’s natural processes create greenhouse gases but it also destroys them. One example would be when plants and animals decay it produces carbon dioxide. Plants absorb carbon dioxide which helps to keep the atmosphere in somewhat stable condition (“Global Warming” 1). Every day the earth releases and absorbs tons of carbon dioxide. Humans burn fossil fuels that give off carbon, which add to the amount that is released into the atmosphere (Global Warming 1). Once the gases reach the atmosphere they are trapped which increases the temperature of the Earth. Some of the gases are from natural causes. Recently humans have contributed to this process (“Global Warming” 1).

Gases in the atmosphere trap the heat given off from the sun and prevent the heat from going back into space, which contributes to global warming. This trapping is called the greenhouse effect (“Global Warming”1). The greenhouse effect is a normal process and without it our planet would not be able to sustain life. If the gases in the atmosphere increase, so will the Earth’s temperature, which in turn will make the earth inhabitable for humans in the future. It is very important that we do everything we can to help our planet. One thing we can do is to replant trees. Trees help reduce the amount of carbon that is released into the atmosphere. you kind of stated that planting trees was a way to help a couple paragraphs ago. either delete this one or the last one. Loggers chop down trees which give off carbon dioxide, but if we replant the trees after we chop them down, the trees will absorb the carbon dioxide that is given off (“Global Warming” 1). Aerosols affect the climate by scattering and absorbing solar radiation and changing the properties of clouds, which the damage can be serious. This absorption warms the air instead of the sunlight being absorbed by the surface of the earth causing the temperature of the air to rise (“Global Warming”1).

Some may want to know what affairs are producing greenhouse gases that contribute to the global warming process. There are many things that give off these gases, and each can have complicated effects. The growth, harvest, processing, and transportation of food have a giant impact on global warming and produce a lot of greenhouse gas.again, you already stated this earlier in the paper Many of them are all different types of foods and the pollution made in their production and transportation (“Is Your Lunch Causing Global Warming?” 2). Nearly 25% of greenhouse gas is traced to the food they consume in an industrialized nation. Livestock has a big impact too. There are 37,000 cows in one city in Kansas. They pack groups of 150 cows into a giant grid that has pens, which gives the cows room to live. This grid is called a feedlot (“Is Your Lunch Causing Global Warming?” 2).

As we know, beef generates a lot of greenhouse gases and so do the animals. Feedlots reduce the amount of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere, which slows the process of global warming. Feedlots are so efficient that they have lowered the cost of beef, and is no longer considered a luxury item (“Is Your Lunch Causing Global Warming?” 2). Beef is the worst food to produce because it takes more energy and creates a plethora of greenhouse gases. It takes 11 times more greenhouse gases to produce one pound of beef than it does to produce one pound of chicken. (you already stated this earlier in the paper)One pound of Beef takes 100 times more greenhouse gases than it does to produce one pound of carrots (“Is Your Lunch Causing Global Warming?” 2).

Many are curious about what will happen to the Earth’s future if we don’t address this issue correctly. Addressing global warming is harder than it sounds. There are so many complicated effects that one problem can have. For an example, logging cuts down trees which give off carbon dioxide, and slash is left behind. The slash left behind from logging provides shelter for small animals, and if it is burnt it gives off a much more harmful gas (“Global Warming” 3). Records of the globe's temperatures show that the Earth is becoming warmer. The averaged surface temperatures show that the Northern and Southern hemispheres increased the fastest (Cicerone.1). That would be the entire world.

Global warming affects the planet in many different ways and scientists come up with ideas on what will happen in the future. Scientists use computers to predict the effects of a single event. It is difficult for scientists to design a computer program that models the Earth’s complex climate, and is able to predict what will happen (Cicerone. 4). Scientists say, "depending on how fast these changes take place the impact may be beneficial to some regions. Yet, the future is still hard to predict, some regions may be able to adapt to the changes if they don’t come to quick." (Where did this source come from?

If the community doesn’t do something to lessen the amount of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere, the future will be greatly affected. Humans can reduce the amount of meat we consume, which will decrease the amount of gas that enters the atmosphere. Planting trees also helps because it absorbs carbon dioxide and gives off oxygen. Another way that greatly increases the amount of greenhouse gas is to burn less fossil fuels; byproducts of gasoline give off lots of CO2 (Cicerone .1).

Global warming will drastically affect the future generations if humans don’t start cutting back on carbon emissions and greenhouse gases. Global warming is a gigantic part of the Earth’s climate and it affects everything in many different ways (“Global Warming” 3). Greenhouse gases assemble in the atmosphere and trap the suns heat. The heat warms the globe because it is floating around the Earth. Any harmful actions humans take might have complicated effects on the future. This is why it is extremely important that the community is aware of what is happening to the globe. Humans must be educated about global warming and its effects. There are many ways the community can help reduce the impact on global warming and make a better future for generations to come. If we continue to pollute the atmosphere with harmful greenhouse gases it will become harder to reverse the affects of global warming.

I put many corrections in red, but not all of them, so either copy and paste what I wrote into word or re-read it VERY carefully. I changed tenses of many words after corrections. Not to be blunt but I probably just changed your paper from an F or D to a C. There are sooooo many repetitive sentences. I think you told everyone to plant trees in every paragraph of the paper so cut down on some of that. Also I deleted entire sentences so watch out for that.

Another way you can help reduce global warming is RECYCLING. Im not sure what format you wrote this in so I cant help correct any of your citations if they are incorrect. I know many people are not good at English so dont take it personally but this paper isnt a B or an A unless you are in a lower class.

Edited December 22, 2010 by finkster

[Carroot1]

comm II. ill look at the revisions thanks!

yea sometimes i used dictionary reference to find better words i know i suck at writing

thanks for actually revising and pointing out mistakes!

Edited December 22, 2010 by Carroot1